Dialogue Tips, Now You’re Talking.

Here is a dialogue extract from my new novel. But, does it pass the acid test? Does it move the plot along and does it create interest? You can decide.

“Have you seen this?” he asks, pointing above to a square containing sixteen smaller ones, each carved with a number. They gather close and focus on the strange pattern.

Ted is intrigued, “I love these puzzles, but what does it mean?”

“I was never good with numbers,” adds Claudine. “I preferred Music and the Arts.”

“Oh, this is very much Art,” Michael replies. “It’s the Art of Numbers.” He points, “If you add up the numbers in the first row, what is the total?”

“33,” says Ted, without hesitating.

“Very good,” says Michael. “What about the total in each of the other rows?”

“They add up to 33 too.”

“Well done. Do you notice any other patterns?”

Suzie was first to guess, “Why, each column makes a total of 33 as well.”

“Aha, very good indeed. What about the diagonals?”

“33 for both of them. That’s amazing.”

“Bravo, but what is significant about the number 33?”

“I have it,” Claudine finally announces.

“Really?” asks Michael. “I thought you hated numbers.”

All dialogue should pass the following criteria:

  • It must move the story forward. After each conversation or exchange, the reader should be one step closer to either the climax or the conclusion of your story.
  • It should reveal relevant information about the character. The right dialogue will give the reader insight into how the character feels, and what motivates him or her to act.
  • It must help the reader understand the relationship between the characters.
    If your dialogue doesn’t accomplish all of the above, it is a waste of words.

    The best dialogue is brief

    It’s a slice and not the whole pizza. You don’t need to go into lengthy exchanges to reveal an important truth about the characters, their motivations, and how they view the world. Plus, dialogue that goes on for too long can start to feel like a tennis match with the reader switching back and forth between characters. Lengthy dialogue can be exhausting for the reader. Pair the dialogue down to the minimum that you need for the characters to say to each other.

    Avoid small talk

    In your novel, never ever waste your dialogue with small talk.

    In the real world, small talk fills in the awkward silence, but in the world of your novel, the only dialogue to include is the kind that reveals something necessary about the character and/or plot. How’s the weather? doesn’t move the plot.

    Don’t info dump

    While you can certainly use dialogue to learn more about your characters, you shouldn’t use it to dump a whole lot of information on the reader.

    It’s cringeworthy to read a dialogue exchange that starts with:

    “As you know…”

    If the character already knows, then why is the other character repeating it?

    Be consistent

    Remember to be consistent with your characters. Someone who speaks in a self-depreciating and shy demeanor won’t automatically become bold and acerbic.

    When your characters speak, they should stay true to who they are. Even without character tags, the reader should be able to figure out who’s talking.

    Create suspense

    Use dialogue to increase the suspense between characters.

    Minimize identifying tags

    “He said, she said” gets boring after a while. And the answer isn’t to switch out those “said” tags with other words like “enthused” or “shouted”. (By the way, when it doubt, “said” wins out.)

    Not only is it boring for the reader to constantly see “he said” or “said she”, it’s also disruptive. Identifiers take the reader out of the immersive world of your story and reminds them that you, the author, are relaying a story. That can be pretty jarring, and it can happen if you use identifiers too often.

    Of course, you can’t not use identifiers. They’re vital for establishing who’s speaking, but can be minimized by doing the following:

    • Creating a unique pattern of speech, as we discussed above.
    • Using descriptive follow ups. (i.e. “That’s not what I said.” Vincent reached for the rock.)

    Read it aloud

    During the editing process, you should always read your manuscript aloud, but do pay special attention to your dialogue.

    If the dialogue doesn’t seem to flow, or you’re tripping over your words, it’s not going to sound right to the reader.

    [Read more here from the NY Book Editors. Meanwhile, how did I score?]

“She was Delicious”

How should a writer describe their characters? Well, for inspiration, listen to Orson Welles as he describes Cornelia Lunt (“She was delicious”) and others. For me, there is a magical quality to Orson’s rhetoric. It rises and falls in clipped phrases, filled with pauses, that captivate the listener and reel them closer with each story.

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