The last post was discussing chapters and letting them sit for some time before the final editing process. In my final chapter I came across this line:
The walls are bathed in orange and the sea is dotted with boats scurrying home.
Nothing special here, but perhaps I could change one word, giving me,
The walls are bathed in orange and the sea is scattered with boats scurrying home.
Ah, that sound better. “scattered” implies disorder and chaos – like boats scattered by a strong wind. But “scurrying” might be awkward? I may have to revisit this sentence again?