Looking for another word

While working on a sentence, I needed a stronger word that “looking”:

Did I miss something important across my desk at MI6 and become the target of a foreign group looking for revenge?

‘looking’ lacks urgency and power. Is this better?

Did I miss something important across my desk at MI6 and become the target of a foreign group seeking revenge?

‘seeking’ is better, but still lame. How about,

Did I miss something important across my desk at MI6 and become the target of a foreign group hungry for revenge?

Ah, ‘hungry’ carries a deeper desire and works better.

Less Words, Less Crap

I’m revising a paragraph and it doesn’t read well. I take out a complex phrase and, voila, the paragraph flows.¬†Fewer words can energize writing and increase the pace; more words slow it down. When editing, I ask myself:

  1. What descriptive text can I remove, yet retain the setting?
  2. Do I need this action or does it detract from the plot?
  3. Is there a better way to convey this character’s mood?
  4. Can I break a long chapter into two shorter ones?
  5. Does the sentence length vary enough?
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